How this sentence sounds right?

"Problem Gambling: It's not just money you put at stake"

I am trying to do a anti-gamble poster and that is the caption for it. The poster is trying to convey that it's not all about money, you are also risking your family, work or even life when you problem-gamble.

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*DOES this sentence sound right?

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  • 2 months ago
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    That sentence as posted sounds fine and gets its message across in a strong way.

    You could consider making one of both of these changes:

    1) Delete the words "you put"

    ~  PROBLEM GAMBLING

    ~ It's not just money at stake

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    2) Change "just" to "only"

    ~ ~  PROBLEM GAMBLING ~ ~

     It's not only money you put at stake

    -----------------------

    3) With both changes

    ~  PROBLEM GAMBLING ~

     It's not only money at stake

    ------------------------

    4) With no changes (the original as posted)

      ~ ~  PROBLEM GAMBLING ~ ~

     It's not just money you put at stake

  • Anonymous
    2 months ago

    In the context of a slogan on a poster, that sentence sounds good.

    Maybe put 'Problem Gambling' in bold type on one line - without the colon. Then the rest on a line, maybe two lines, below the heading.

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