abanti asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 2 months ago

what about my poem?  MY SONG...?


A song of my life,

citing desires with new imaginations,

i sung and spoke the words of my life,

taking the deep emotions

to illustrate our history,

to make our every breath beautiful,

the song entertains our wishes,

and it gives an indefinite speed to our power

the words of the song is a strongest flutter,

as it makes our life more dynamic and passionate,

forever forever.....   

1 Answer

  • Marli
    Lv 7
    2 months ago

    It reads like a song to the loved one about their shared passion, except that you used "my" instead of "our" in the first three lines 

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