My poems, i can't tell?

i wrote some poems, but everyone seems like they're lying, and telling me they're good. it might just be i can't accept that what i wrote is good, or maybe i'm just paranoid. can you comment as much as you can on two of them? first one HEART VICE It hurts again It started squeezing... show more i wrote some poems, but everyone seems like they're lying, and telling me they're good. it might just be i can't accept that what i wrote is good, or maybe i'm just paranoid. can you comment as much as you can on two of them?

first one
HEART VICE

It hurts again
It started squeezing harder
It won't let up
And I try to pretend
I just smile louder
I won't let anyone know

It has begun constricting
It doesn't ever end
It won't ease up
I can't show that I’m hurting
This attack I can't begin to fend
I won't let anything show

It will make me lame
It leaves no opening
It won't give up
I will never be the same
I am left only hoping
But if I die, will I go above or below?

Am I to be trapped forever in this heart vice?

second one
DREAMING?

Am I dreaming?
I can't tell
Bottom of this rabbit hole
From which I fell
Is this heaven
Or am I still in hell?

It doesn't make sense
But im not sure it’s fake
When it almost feels real
That’s when I wake
I can't see im cold
My eyes burn I begin to shake

And when I’m sure it’s a dream
It just doesn’t end
It’s like just a little
My reality begins to bend
These two worlds are different
But their boundaries are beginning to blend

I don't have much more time
The end is near I’ve seen it
But is this real or am I dreaming
He’s coming but this can't be it
He stabs me in my chest
This must be a dream, so why can I feel it?
Update: thank you, Gemini Singer, but i write poems when a certain emotion, or feeling, starts overflowing or boiling over. if i feel happiness to the point where it is seeping from me, or if it is hugely inspirational, then i will write about it. so far though, i haven't found anything close.
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