I would like to know if this short poem would be good as a greeting card?

You asked me how long I'd love you

and what you meant to me.

I smiled,"My heart is yours dear, look inside and see."

I opened all the pages and in words written in red.

"I'll love you longer then always."

Was only thing it said.

Seehowtheyrun, 4-4-2010

Update:

Thanks to the first two answers. I want to send it to a special guy on a heart shaped card.

Update 2:

Thanks Norris, you're right. It does work better.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    change line 4 to say

    "and with words written in red"

    It flows and sounds better that way.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Awwwww thts so sweet! And i think it would be Perfect as a greeting card! Hope I Helped!

    Source(s): xXx
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Awww it lovely it will work great.

    Source(s): Me
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