A friend of mine asked me if I would put his poem up here for opinions. So here it is.?

The Eyes of Africa

In the silken shadows

on the African plain, she wakes.

Hunger presses her to rise.

Food will not come to her.

She glides as silent as the clouds.

She is on the hunt and nothing

escapes her eyes.

Clad in darkness her gaze shines

with the flame of African life.

What's your opinion?

I've already given him mine.

Thanks

Update:

Well, Happy H this is what he gave me. I can't give you the rest of the story because he didn't write any more.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    Yes, that's very pretty, you can see it unfolding in your head.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Very nice poem, your friend is a talented poet!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It's okay. Where is the rest of the story?

  • 1 decade ago

    I really like it! Nice write,

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