I wrote this poem. tell me what you think?

i asked like two other questions and someone had really helped me and it really helped here is the poem. tell me what you think. i need some criticism. and tell me where i can fix things at. love is the way i felt when we first met, the way i got butterflies in my stomach love is the way i felt when you... show more i asked like two other questions and someone had really helped me and it really helped here is the poem. tell me what you think. i need some criticism. and tell me where i can fix things at.

love is the way i felt when we first met,
the way i got butterflies in my stomach

love is the way i felt when you walked towards me,
the way my heart pounded so fast

love is the way i just walked up to you and spoke,
the way i felt so nervous

love is the way i wished you had your arm around me,
the way you had your arm around her

love is the way you told me you liked me,
the way i liked you

love is the way i felt when i looked into your eyes,
the way it sent a tingling sensation down my spine

love is the way i felt when you tickled me,
the way you wouldn't let me frown

love is the way i felt when you called me babe,
the way i had known i was your one and only

love is the way i felt when you told me you loved me,
the way i feel for you

love is the way you understand me,
the way i understand you

love is the way you put your arms around me,
the way i feel so secure

love is the way you did all this,
the way i knew i loved you too
Update: what is an ice pick??
Update 2: also for those rude ice pick vomit comments. im sure if you love someone close to you. maybe not love like i wrote about but about a loved one maybe a friend or a family member. you have feelings too you know.
Update 3: hey thanks poppinfresh. now i know what an ice pick is!! you rock
Update 4: good way to make me feel. im not bloated im only 92 pounds. my mom is bloaded but thats cuz she has chroan disease and i wasnt tryin to rip anyone off. on one of my other yahoo answer questions someone suggested the first to parts which helped me write the rest of my poem. all i wanted to do was to write a poem so... show more good way to make me feel. im not bloated im only 92 pounds. my mom is bloaded but thats cuz she has chroan disease and i wasnt tryin to rip anyone off. on one of my other yahoo answer questions someone suggested the first to parts which helped me write the rest of my poem. all i wanted to do was to write a poem so that i could express my feelings and get them out. not to make ppl call me names.
Update 5: here are the lyrics to my heart will go on. i dont think they even go together! (Love Theme From "Titanic") Every night in my dreams I see you. I feel you. That is how I know you go on. Far across the distance And spaces between us You have come to show you go on. Near, far, wherever you... show more here are the lyrics to my heart will go on. i dont think they even go together!


(Love Theme From "Titanic")

Every night in my dreams
I see you. I feel you.
That is how I know you go on.

Far across the distance
And spaces between us
You have come to show you go on.

Near, far, wherever you are
I believe that the heart does go on
Once more you open the door
And you're here in my heart
And my heart will go on and on

Love can touch us one time
And last for a lifetime
And never go till we're one

Love was when I loved you
One true time I hold to
In my life we'll always go on

Near, far, wherever you are
I believe that the heart does go on
Once more you open the door
And you're here in my heart
And my heart will go on and on

There is some love that will not
go away

You're here, there's nothing I fear,
And I know that my heart will go on
We'll stay forever this way
You are safe in my heart
And my heart will go on and on
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