gmirp
Lv 4
gmirp asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 1 decade ago

"Eternal Wine" a poem.. based on Romeo and Juliet ..what do think?

i know i know i cannot touch shakespeare when it comes to writing..i just wanted to write about Romeo and Juliet's tragic love story .

"Eternal Wine "

By gep

I felt it the moment we met

our destination Capulet

unbridled passion

tragic end

mortal enemy

my friend

I'll live for you

if you die for me

we'll share our love

eternally

Montague you've won my heart

So this world we must depart

We on this plain would never work

Displeased.. they'd be forever hurt

We must drink eternal wine

We'll share our fate

Your lips on mine.

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  • 1 decade ago
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    what do u mean you cannot touch shakespeare? I think he would be proud of that poem. It's called inspiration. And you've used that well.

    I would give it a 9.8 out of 10 in my opinion

    To me that poem was superb (i think thats how you spell it)

    Keep on writing poety, you've got a really great talent there!

  • corra
    Lv 4
    4 years ago

    hiya, there's a updated action picture produced from Romeo and Juliet directed via Baz Luhrmann. (as somebody mentioned, the single with Claire Danes and Leonardo Dicaprio) It modernises the play yet nonetheless has all unique textual content textile. (different than any cuts made via the director) observing it helped me comprehend Romeo and Juliet a great deal these days for a school overall performance of the play. :)

  • 1 decade ago

    K.O. G-LO,

    This was a very exotic piece,

    excellent carvation of the words u have chosen and put together.

    I think that the line ''I'll live. . . . . . . . . . Die for me''

    should be edited and thought upon b'coz i think this line is dis-sweetening the taste of the poem. see this

    "I'll die for you ,

    If you live for me"

    well i really dont know the viewpoint from which you have written it. So. . .

    Source(s): Sorry for poor english.
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Bravismo. Very impressive.

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  • Dondi
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    You have done an excellent job of capturing the true essence of the classic tragic love story. Thanks for sharing it.

  • 1 decade ago

    I like this very much.

  • 1 decade ago

    your good real good..

    10/10

  • 1 decade ago

    i think that was awesome! really cool my friend!

    Source(s): me and my messed up mind! (:D
  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    beautiful!

  • Jim
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago

    I like it :-)

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