PLEASE READ MY POEM & Tell your thoughts ?

Sad poems =my bad poem (my title) lol

Hey I sat on my couch today,

Trying to figure out a way,

To write as good as you,

I thought of many ideas,

But they all went off my page,

Because they couldnt compare,

With the beauty and the flare,

That you generate,

In every poem that you create,

My poems were too sappy,

About being happy,

Love and how great it is,

How life is full of bliss,

I have to say you got me beat,

I just cant compete,

With your beautiful sad poems,

Because I dont have any of my own,

This poem may be very bad,

But I am very sad,

Because I can never write the way you do,

Thats why you are so cool,

Just know that I think your sad poems rule

Update:

This is dedicated to "YOU SALENE (WeNdY)"!

your POEMS really do ROCK! LOL!

ur FRIEND!!

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  • Argent
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago
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    grl u do too write good poems. They just aren't sad. U have to understand I'vve been though a lot in my 16 years of life. I feel u should be grateful for having such a good outlook on life. I luv u like a sis and hope that u can't write the sad poems cause that just means that u understand pain and I don't want u too feeel like I have been. Luv Yah Like A Sis.

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  • 1 decade ago

    That was a good poem. Here are some tips:

    1. Rhyme or don't, depend on what poem you are going to write.

    2. Write about something that you know

    3. Write about something in your past.

    4. put song lyrics in your poem that you made.

    5.And have a successful life ahead of you!

    Source(s): Me. Email me!
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  • 1 decade ago

    I feel that this was a forced attempt to generate the rhyme and not enough attention to the feel or rhythm of the poem.

    The words are ok. the conveyance of admiration and appreciation for the subject is understandable. The flow is just lacking.

    You established a pattern in the first three lines that you then changed or ignored through out the remainder of the piece.

    Please, I hope you continue to work on your poetry. I like to read the work.

    Thank you

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  • 1 decade ago

    That was a cool poem. And by the way, even if your poems are not as sad as Wendy's, I think yours rule too.. They are awesome!

    Source(s): me, me, me, me, me
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  • 1 decade ago

    I really enjoyed your poem!! you should continue to right but in a comedy matter

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  • 1 decade ago

    hello, well i feel what u did right is all fine, its just a begining and on shud always be free to express oneself, whether by way of prosing or sharing it with friends. i will just say it a good attempt and dont stop urself from expressing urself

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  • 1 decade ago

    wow! i can totallly relate! i know so many people who write better than me, and im sad because i want to write that well, 2. ur poem describes EVERYTHING i thot and felt! well done!

    hav a golden star *

    btw, who were you talking about that writes better than you? its probably not true that they write "better". we all are good in different areas of writing. those that can write, that is. but u did a great job!

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    I agreed that the poem is very bad. Don't try so hard to rhyme.

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Why you talk about sadly poems.I love your poems.But try to get a happy ending.Why that part:'BUT I AM very SAD"?

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  • Ronnie
    Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    It's not organized or poetic. It appears to be you just plainly saying something to someone else with randomly placed rhymes.

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